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PostSubject: I made a little poem   Mon Nov 05, 2012 11:25 pm

So anyways I was just in a writing mood lately and wrote this up. It's not supposed to be in any real structured format though so have at it.


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Come at me

show me what I have left

show me my faults

my fears

my blatant views on the world.

Don’t tell me

how perfect

how wonderful

how pretty I am.

There’s nothing here

nothing left to hide

I just want out of this

sad pretty little world

that I call home.

I still want us

the way it used to be

it still is that way

only i fear those lines on the map.

I crinkle it up only to see

that you don’t move

not an inch

not a mile

not a yard or meter.

Someday oh someday

we’ll find a way

to triumph over this terrible

occupation we now hold.

I will wait.

I will triumph.

I will show the world that I am nothing more than me.
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PostSubject: Re: I made a little poem   Mon Nov 05, 2012 11:31 pm

BETTER LOVE STORY THAN TWILIGHT

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PostSubject: Re: I made a little poem   Mon Nov 05, 2012 11:35 pm

Chezerony wrote:
BETTER LOVE STORY THAN TWILIGHT

I CAN'T TELL IF YOU ARE SERIOUS BUT THANK YOU Very Happy


no seriously. I had no idea where this poem was going so that's why there's this sudden jump in the middle.
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PostSubject: Re: I made a little poem   Mon Nov 05, 2012 11:36 pm

Oh I really like this. So deep cat

+1

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PostSubject: Re: I made a little poem   Mon Nov 05, 2012 11:38 pm

doki wrote:
Chezerony wrote:
BETTER LOVE STORY THAN TWILIGHT

I CAN'T TELL IF YOU ARE SERIOUS BUT THANK YOU Very Happy


no seriously. I had no idea where this poem was going so that's why there's this sudden jump in the middle.
I'm being cereal Smile

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PostSubject: Re: I made a little poem   Mon Nov 05, 2012 11:46 pm

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Oh I really like this. So deep cat

+1

Its funny how in person the deepest thing you could get out of me is probably "I like food".

But anyways thank you! I missed writing so much.


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PostSubject: Re: I made a little poem   Tue Nov 06, 2012 1:45 am

Very well done, you added a lot of emotion into your writing. I love it. Keep up the great work.

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PostSubject: Re: I made a little poem   Tue Nov 06, 2012 9:55 am

Great poem, deep, terse, and inspirational. Very Happy

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PostSubject: Re: I made a little poem   Tue Nov 06, 2012 10:28 am

^what he said
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PostSubject: Re: I made a little poem   Tue Nov 06, 2012 10:42 am

doki wrote:
Cowlicks wrote:
Oh I really like this. So deep cat

+1

Its funny how in person the deepest thing you could get out of me is probably "I like food".

But anyways thank you! I missed writing so much.



I can attest to this post, haha. Good poem.
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PostSubject: Re: I made a little poem   Tue Nov 06, 2012 1:07 pm

Amadeus wrote:
doki wrote:


Its funny how in person the deepest thing you could get out of me is probably "I like food".

But anyways thank you! I missed writing so much.



I can attest to this post, haha. Good poem.

I don't mean to haha. Just at school its not the best time to get lost in thought.
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PostSubject: Re: I made a little poem   Sun Nov 18, 2012 9:56 pm

Resolve!

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Also: this is probably the only post today, from my observations. NOT GUD PPL

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PostSubject: Re: I made a little poem   Tue Nov 20, 2012 12:07 am

we moved back to the old forums, art....

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